I have been looking at these for a while now and can't make up my mind.. They ar going to be a flyer you hand out. . . .

Thankful for various input. . . .

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hmm

I voted for the horizontal.

The vertical is a little more appealing as far as being suggestive.. maybe more appealing to guys. The horizontal, however, is better at getting the information across in a cleaner format and still interesting with it's layout.

My 2 cents.

thanks HeloMech,
I spent more time on it as well...

I like the colors on the first one but I find the graphic of the body weird and distracting - like the peninsulas extending out from the legs under "September 29".

In the vertical one, the K in weekend makes the girl look like she has a camel toe.

Aside from that, I don't understand the point of view for the second one. Seems like its the back of a station wagon view.

They are both cool tho. Nice work.

you are looking through a window inside a car and next to you there is another car..

thanks

(at least no one said that I should move home)

WTF are these? Was it a realy fat girl that still has the excess skin on the inside of her thighs?

Her feet tucked under her, right? She's on her knees.

perfect height then.....

anyway... if she is on her knees, what are the big blobs at her knees?

I find the font shifts very distracting. italics, straight, bolt, white, black... too much shifting throughout.

I agree with Karl about the fonts. The top one needs a blocky easily read font to stand out from the girl, I prefer the second - carwindow effect - one. At first I thought it was sunglasses. That would work. Also, they both have too much unformation. It is a big commitment to ask of a reader- make it easy on the eyes and brain....

guys, all the info on the flyers need t o be there. Client told me so.

I like the window one.. i understand sbout the fonts, but to get the desired effect one needs t o add more interest for the viewer when its as much info as it is.. thanks for input though


2 swedish girls in the other room and im on the club site

Forget the shape of the girl for a second and look at the shape of the blue area between her legs.


I think it looks like Dean Cain.



Nice work.

As a graphics guy, you should tell your client there is too much info on the ad.

I can think of two or three sentences that aren't critical to the ad. I dont' agree that the changes in fonts adds interest. Between the odd shapes and the every-changing fonts, I get a headache. Maybe I'm just turning into an old fart.

You asked for input, I'm just being honest.

Okay... here some more feedback...

Free Weekend Tan "@" September 29-31?

@ = at, right?

Reads... Free Weekend Tan "at" September 29-31st... doesn't make sense to me?

Also... and here it comes...

There are only 30 days in September?

Thank you... now where's my prize?

Otherwise I like #2.... Can you angle the fonts a little to coincide with the angle of the window?

I told him several times that it is to much info, the ad is only 4.75*10 which is not much space and an ackward size..

Sept 31st haha, I didnt look, I just took the text he provided me.. Free Weekend Tan does not make sense to me, but since english is not my first language I dont know..

I was thinking about that so it reads better.. But not sure, I will try though. Thanks for all the feedback.. Back to work again I guess..

Give me a while an I'll post the changes

Move back to sweden, and get back with the supermodel.

Remember, your client's input is more important than ours. bring in both pictures and ask him which one he likes. I the crap doesn't sell, then it's not your problem. You're just the graphics guy, not his marketing director.

GRAND OPENING needs to be relocated over the cooch area, thank you.


Hello!

an EXCELLENT idea. places all our other complaints in perspective.


Truely. Sex is used to sell EVERYTHING. I think that is because it works. Also could say "FREE" in big letters across the region of focus.

Perhaps the silhouette in the top is giving birth.. and the things between her thighs are baby's legs...

... nah! That would be gross!

K,
Here is another version. I cleaned it up a little and changed some colors to make it "pop" more..

I'm not liking the text to the right to much..

Any advice?


(Notice the new car.. had to put a porsche in there..)